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Conch Shell VII: Creative Consultant 957

#Reviewer #Discussion #General

/fic/ was, and still is, known for its wide variety of review threads, where authors can go to get input on their fiction. In the past, I attempted to throw my metaphorical hat into the reviewing ring, but I found I lacked the literary chops to do so. My strengths didn't lie in identifying problems with existing works. But, as I discovered in the process of writing my "pet project" crossover, they did lie in world-building and working out small details. So I bought an office out in the middle of nowhere and started offering up my services.

To oversimplify the matter, the standard reviewer's thread focuses on stories, making it effectively a more personalized version of the Training Grounds. With that in mind, my thread will function as a personalized version of the Story Forge. Got a story idea you want to develop, but you just don't know how to start? Don't know where you're going with a scene? Hit a brick wall with your story? Congratulations, you're my new clientele. I'll offer my opinion on your ideas, so they can grow and mature. Remember, there is no such thing as a bad idea—only bad execution. I shall be constructive as possible, and I shall never tell you your idea sucks. Or, if I absolutely must do that, I will do my damnedest to explain why.

So come on, kid. Step into my office. I don't have all day.
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Hey, I remember your work in the Story Forge!

Godspeed. I wish you well in helping fledgling stories and ideas.

Conch Shell VII 1578

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I decided to take the opportunity to remind the people of /fic/ that my thread actually exists.
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Anonymous 1581

>>1578
The regulars moved, but I'm not so sure if the newcomers (the ones without a group of experience people they just have to email) have caught up to the turn of things. Maybe bump your thread in ponychan as well?

2041

I was wondering if you are willing to help me with a story I am trying to write

2042

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>>2041
Well, it was about damn time, I said to myself. I swallowed my pride and asked the client for more information.

2043

Well, are you familiar with the James Bond franchise?

2044

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>>2043
I told the client the truth: no, I was not.

2045

Oh well. How about The Nostalgia Critic, Linkara, or Angry Joe?

2046

If you need to know about James Bond, it's about a man or spy working in M.I.6 doing a bunch of interesting adventures. I'd recommend checking it out.

2047

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>>2045
I… have an inkling I might know where the client's going with this.
"…Okay, let's make this simple. Tell me what your fic is and what you want me to do with it."

2048

Well, one of the stories I'm writing is called The Nostalgia Critic, Linkara, and Angry Joe Power Hour. You can find it on fimfiction and it is moderately successful. I have hit a brick wall and I was wondering if you could maybe help me with getting it off the ground again.

2049

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>>2048
I told the client I was a little busy at the moment, but I'd look into it as soon as I got the chance.

2050

Thank you

I can't believe I found this thread :D Carocrazy 2225

I don't know if you'll remember this story or not. I had you review it when it was in its infancy. I put off working on it for a while and by the time I came back here the people had split between chans of pony and mlp.

Well I really was looking to see if good ol' Conch Shell had a creative consultant thread up, but I only searched ponychan.

The idea just hit me to check mlpchan and what do my eyes see? Excellence.

I'm never looking for a proofread or someone to point out every little thing for me. I appreciate anyone who does, and I think I take criticism really well. Mostly, however, I just want to know if I've written something worth reading. I have friends who write fanfictions for other fandoms (mostly dr who), but it's hard to review a pony fanfic without being a brony (or pegasister respectfully).

Anyways I know you've said you're busy but (and I'm gonna do some weird version of rp now)

**
A strange man walked into the Conch's office. He stopped at the door and waited for a sound. "Asleep" he said, rolling into the office not making a sound. He looked up from his awesome slide (it was at least 4 feet) to find no Conch Shell. "Away? Intriguing…". He walked over to the desk in the center of the room, and took a look at the piles of papers on the desk. "Looks like he has a lot of other work to do… meh", and with that dropped yet another folder on the Conch's desk.

On the front it read: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1kN2fUceKAfMVETvvOcH2x0FMboUKEOMc_vhqcDtzn_4/edit

"He'll get to it when he gets to it.", and with that he broke the window and yelled "OH SHIT I BROKE THE WINDOW", and flew away with a loud "CONCH RULES!". Because he's Rainbow Dash, and he can't die because he has to wait and see what the Conch thinks of his work.

**
Okay well that was fun. Anyways, yeah. I have no idea where I'm going with part two after yesterdays episode of mlp. I pretty much had that exact scene between scootaloo and dash planned out. It was going to be so awesome and now I… I don't know, but if this is worth anything I'll figure something out.

Conch, you rock.

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Why, it is a pleasure to come across an old face!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tgE-epNlWI_gEvXhBADB4-43dz6BrCuZ_g7OwHSzgos/edit#heading=h.fskn2wf4d7j9

The above is ready to be published; well worked and fine toothed comb'd. The below is bastard hell spawn, upon which I have spent far more time hating and puzzling over, then I have on the above's entirety.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1VR9Tf2G6AIPPsmg34rHibBVn8bUmKV9QpRSE_9mvVsw/edit

Like Dostoyevsky's men of action, I have hit a bloody big wall.

If you wish, a brief outline of where I'm going shall be provided upon request. But,as it stands, I just want to know what your thoughts are, and where you think I should go with that scene. My wits are at an end, old friend. Your advice is greatly appreciated.

Most Cheerfully,
Paper_mate_Pony

Opinion of "The Nostalgia Critic, Linkara, and Angry Joe Power Hour" 2238

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Well, I'd spent enough time loitering around /rp/ for one day. I had a war to fight, but that wouldn't happen until Tuesday. I decided to finish some of the cases I'd been left. I wandered into the office, considering whether I should continue to use images of my human form, or instead use the ponysona I'd whipped up for /rp/. But then I saw three case files sitting on my desk, and I knew it'd have to wait.

The first case was a crossover. And not just any crossover, a crossover with two of my favorite people of all time (and Angry Joe. He's cool, too.) Needless to say, I wanted to see this case succeed. I reminded the client to leave a link next time, like the other two cases, and then I got straight to work.

So with how the humans got there established, and some shenanigans already gotten into, I had to figure out where they would go next. And then the answer came to me. Interludes. "Take Linkara, for example," I told the client. "You know that song they played in his 200th episode? As both allies and enemies come and go, a changed status quo never disrupts the show." They're reviewers. And Linkara in particular is used to this kind of thing. So why didn't he actually review Mare Do Well #85? I feel like the kid had gypped his audience.

Plot-wise, it seemed obvious. Have Celestia talk to them, tell then where the portal is, and have them quest to get back home. Traditional, maybe, but the strength of the characters will carry your story. Maybe if you're feeling adventurous, have some enemies of the reviewers slip through the portal, like Dr. Insano or Corporate Commander. Or maybe just some alternate personas of the reviewers, like Ask That Guy. Actually, having Ask That Guy in Equestria practically writes itself. I told the kid at the end of the day, that was probably the best advice I could give him. Put Ask That Guy in Equestria. Hilarity shall ensue.

With onions.
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Carocrazy… the name sounded vaguely familiar to me. I cracked open the file, and… holy shit on a stick. I remembered this case from Ponychan. This was the guy I gave a semi-thorough proofreading to. Good memories, that case. Good memories. So what had the story become since I'd seen it last?

No, seriously, what? I don't know what I'm looking at here.

I get the Everfree Forest at first. Then we cut to Dash's home, then we cut back to the Everfree and Dash doesn't make it in time. Then we cut to Sugarcube Corner… but at some point, I realized it was a time travel story, and it started clicking into place. Started. Didn't finish. What exactly happened? Wounded Twilight from an alternate timeline, I think?

The case was kind of confusing, is what I'm saying. But confusing introductions are fine, so long as the story elaborates on the confusion and gives the audience a satisfactory number of answers. That's what mysteries are all about. Look at Stephen King, for example.

Before I left, I felt like I had to tell the client something. Working around continuity for your story is something I have a lot of experience with. I hadn't seen the newest episode of MLP, though, so I couldn't offer the client any specific advice… but I knew that if Caro was clever/crazy enough, he'd come up with a way to work around it. And with that, I got up to deal with some real-life issues. The last case on my desk would have to wait for a few hours.

Carocrazy 2243

>>2240






I think I enjoy your reviews more than my fanfiction.

2255

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>>2243
I figured as much. Now I just had to fix my window…

2256

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>>2231
Good old Paper_mate_Pony. He helped me out of a jam with my own writing once, so who would I be to not return the favor? But as soon as I started the case, I too pulled a Dostoyevsky. I didn't have permission to access the document. And if I didn't have that, I couldn't work the case.

2265

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>>2256

Bah, foiled again!

All is open and ready for your keen eye's opinion.

2282

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>>2231
After the issue was corrected, I was able to quickly get to work on the case. Paper_mate_Pony was writing a crossover, too. A Sherlock Holmes crossover, specifically. Now that was an interesting concept. I had only a cursory knowledge of Sherlock Holmes, but I did like all the little touches Paper had thrown in to make the story look like period-appropriate writing. He obviously had a deep love for both mediums, which is all you need for a good crossover.

But he was stuck, and that was why he had come to me. I really didn't know why, though. It seemed obvious to me. In any "realistic" crossover, especially one that involves inter-universal travel, the Princesses are going to want to know about the beings from another world. And because the story was already in Canterlot, it would be a simple thing to bring Holmes, Watson, and Harrison to the castle. In fact, it seems like you were going there already. So bring them there. "Now bear with me," I told him. "Have one of the Princesses be in the throne room… and the other one be in the statue garden. That way, they go out to meet the Princess and they see the statue of Discord, which I assume is the titular "Devil's Statue.""

But maybe that was too obvious. Paper had been a good help and a good friend to me. I didn't want to just tell him things he already knew. When I gave him my findings, I made sure to ask… was that the best I could do? Or was there some other answer that had slipped by me?

2343

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>>2282
Fair'o.
How about my characters? I just feel like they've come out completely different from the previous two chapters. Any suggestions? What do you think?

2346

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>>2343
Characterization… it hadn't occurred to me to check that. I didn't notice any deviation in the characterization, I told him, but he may want to get a second opinion on that just to be safe.


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