First, tags go in the "Comment" box, surrounded by two brackets: [ and ], which should look something like [ #Story ] and become something like #Story
Second:>no synopsis>no genre tags>no characters>new OP asking for review
If you would like your story reviewed, read >>158
and check the Directory at >>159
for a list of open reviewing threads. We'd love to help you with your story, but this is not the way to go.
Now! With that cleared up, welcome to /fic/. Please keep your dexterous appendages within a reasonable radius of your keyboard, and do enjoy the ride.
Have a smashing summer solstice at /fic/. ;DBy the way, your first sentence is a comma splice: “Hurry up Scootaloo, we’re gonna be late!” should be "Hurry up, Scootaloo! We're going to be late!" (or "Hurry up, Scootaloo; we're going to be late!" if you're the kind to put semicolons in dialogue).