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MY LITTLE NYXIE 4960

[My furst stori] #Review plz #Pen Storke is a genus [#Best Poni

Today i want to make an anoum… annoy… say something!

Nyx is my waifu. Dis is story of how she become my waifu.
MY LITTLE NIXIE
So, i was, like, realy sad and stuff cause my parents are all ded in super-duper tragic car acident and my sis wuz rapered or somethin.

Then the dorebell rung!!!!1!l!

I open dore and there wuz a LITTLE NYXIE all for myselves!

and sew I razed her like mai own filly and we had great times and she help me get over my pearants dyeing (but not my sister. that still makes me saaaaad face :*((( ). 1 day she even make sanic darkboom (like rainboom but DARK cuz she all black n stuff) because she went gotta go fast!

Than one day we was watching a super–duper purty setsun and she say "Strum wud you be my daddy and hubby?" and of coarse I sed "forever and ever!"

we had lots of babies and they were kawaii THE END

LITTLE MY NIXIE: FULL LIFE CONSEQUENCES 4961

>>4960
If u liked mai first stery den just weight for the sequel!

Just a little cloop but it really kawaii and stuff so not two icky :)

WHOOPS 4962

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Fergot my arts!

4963

I actually like the picture in the last post there.

Also, this story should be read in the Full Life Consequences voice for full effect. I dont do gmod or I'd offer to make the video myself.
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4964

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>>4963
OC DONUT STEEL.

Nyxie is BUFF (dats BESST UNCLE FRIENDS FOREVAR) for Shiny Amour (but he not nice in new stery but i stil tolreate and <3 him :), so I mayke her REALLY BUFF.

sage 4965

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2/10

Apply yourself, Ion

Review of My Little Nyxie 4966

>>4960
Allow me to be the first to say that this fic is right up there with Past Sins and My Little Dashie as one of the greatest literary achievements ever in the history of writing. As soon as I saw the review request, I knew this was my chance to be a part of something much greater than myself, and if I could make even a tiny contribution to this fic, then my life would be complete.

As you can probably expect, it was very difficult to find anything that could possibly be improved. However, even a genius like yourself will occasionally miss some of the more mundane details, especially when you are divinely inspired as you obviously were when writing this.

After careful review, I believe I found one typo.
>Than one day we was
Missing comma.
>Than one day, we was

Besides that, the only way I think this can be improved is by showing more. You may have heard of showing vs telling. The best way to show and not tell is, of course, using pictures. So if you get as many pictures of Nyxie as you can and embed them directly into the story, this story will soar well beyond My Little Dashie and Past Sins.

I hope this review was helpful. It was an honour to work with an author as accomplished as yourself. Feel free to contact me anytime if you'd like a review of your story.

soundslikeponies!bQsJPGMNfw 4967

I'm honestly pretty disappointed. This was the same circlejerk that happened last year.

2/10

everyone should just let this thread die so we can have a new joke that doesn't suck.
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4968

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>>4965
U JUST MAD CAUSE NXYIE IS STRONGER THEN U.

>>4966
Awww, dank you ^_^
And dunt wery, I has many pictures of my waifu.

>>4967
I dunno wat u talkin aboot.

Tactical 4969

>>4967

If it helps, I really like your joke.

Anonymous 4989

>>4967
I think there is a gay joke embedded there…
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