Unfortunately, you've really not given anyone a whole lot to work off of.
Even in the realms of writer-made single-story threads (Which, as many will tell you, are supremely frowned upon) this is rather short. And, if the story is meant to be intentionally bad (as I draw from your title), you really should make sure the rest of your OP is written in a much better manner than it currently is. It gives credibility.
That said, what you have doesn’t really seem like a prologue. It seems like the first draft of the first draft of the beginning of a prologue. It just isn’t enough to give you anything really helpful right now.>>4572>>4573
What they are trying to say is that criticism is going to come, and that you should not be shocked at it. When you give someone so little to work over, don’t be surprised that their answer shows as little apparent effort as the thing they are replying to. This is a give-and-take process. If you want depth, show
This might be a good idea, or maybe it’s been done to death and the resulting corpse further beaten with a rusty pipe. However, until there’s an actual story to look at, we’ll never really know. A few sentences rarely make a complete story on their own.
Try coming back when you have more to this (and kindly put it in the TTG or some other reviewing thread when you do). You’ll find the criticism still biting, maybe even harsh depending on your reviewer and the results of your labors, but it will likely be a lot more helpful in any case. Give us more, so we can give you more.