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Mlpchan's Official /fic/ Write-Off, First Edition 212[View All]

Hello and welcome to the Official first ever MLPchan /fic/ write-off!

Stories: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/47540/Misconceptions
Voting: http://www.surveymonkey.com/s/ZDWMGLW

– Participants write stories over a 72 hour period
– The stories are written from a prompt given at the event’s onset
– Participants submit their work to an anonymous anthology
– Readers and judges then rate the stories and
– Finally, everything gets wrapped up with author reveals and winners announced

The contest is open to any and all willing participants. All we ask is that you let us know in this thread if you wish to participate.

• Prompt suggestions open Monday, August 20th 18:00 UTC
• Writing begins Friday, August 24th 12:00am UTC.
• Submissions close Monday, August 27th 12:00am UTC.
• Public voting begins Monday, August 27th 04:00 UTC.
• Panel voting begins Friday, August 31st 14:00 UTC.
• Event concludes Tuesday, September 4th.**

Prompt suggestions will be taken via this thread from 6pm UST on Monday, August 20th. Eligible Prompts will be selected and discussed via the staff and decided upon by day one of the writing period.
Criteria for Prompts:
- Obey mlpchan and fimfiction’s guidlines
- Do not lock the author into one specific genre or style
- Offer an acceptable amount of creativity
- Are not inherently vague
- Be some short phrase or figure of speech
- Be appropriate for a title of a story

The rules of the event are:
(1) you adhere to the submission guidelines - https://docs.google.com/document/d/1SOTMJXnj_lj1BCE-D3YGDd2erVcE2g5RY77aSp3Y0r4/edit
(2) you start writing only after the prompt is released;
(3) you submit before the deadline;
(4) your story follows all posting guidelines of Mlpchan and Fimfiction;
(5) your story uses the prompt to a reasonable and discernible degree;
(6) your story is not submitted elsewhere until the event’s conclusion.

We, the Staff, reserve the right to disqualify any entry with or without reason.

Once the stories are collected into an anthology post on fimfiction.net/user/MLPchan_write-off, a public poll will be posted to allow readers to rate the stories. Voters must read at least half of the stories submitted before casting a vote.

After a week, five finalists will be chosen and sent to panel members to have the winner decided.

The judging criteria with which the staff will follow can be found here: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1hgVW8JSqIp4NVF2fUd9E8-tJJ359689sDrmmClDeBF4/edit

First-place Winner:
A submission to EQD
Stickied thread displaying your fic
A Pinkie Pie brushable w/ mini-DVD
Friendship is Magic coloring book
Blind Bag figurine

**Tentative; meaning it may or may not change according to the Staff's discretion. A 24 hour announcement will predate the final closure.

A special thank you to Roger!DodgeR for letting use his /fic/ write-off formatting, to the Judges for their help and advice, to Anonthony for helping to make this possible and for providing prizes, and to Bleeding Rain!DROPS for his invaluable support.
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Anonthony!EEEEEEEE2c 366

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Myself as well, as you might imagine I haven't had a ton of free time, but thankfully I have a long appointment tomorrow and I'll have a decent chunk of time to sit on my laptop and read, and I can get to the stories and offer some critique.
>Note, I'm not a practiced reviewer or anything, and I've only ever -completed- one fic recently, but I will offer some critique

author of: "the hounds" 367

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Never! *evil laughter*

but yeah, it's a new chan contest, don't expect hundreds of views. The winner gets a submission from EqD with a golden star attached that says "he's won this micro write-off, so you might want to check him out" but basically he doesn't get a free pass for EqD. Then again, as I repeated before, this is still an incredibly small chan, so even if it gets stickied, you won't get too many views. If you're playing for fun(and those delicious first prize), the you've entered the right contest! If you're trying to get views… not the best, really.
>pic kind of unrelated but not so much


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I'll talk to Sarf first if I can, but I had planned on making it public visible tonight.

Author of "The Chuckleberry Chive" 369

Don't despair, folks! We've still got, what, three, four days left? I myself have only gotten halfway through the entries and plan on posting everything at once. Courage, fellows!


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Okay, so sorry I'm late. [insert dumb excuse here] only five of you voted although that could be due to me not putting up the voting soon enough but here are the top five stories right now, and are what will be looked at by us judges.

The Retelling of Myths and Legends 7.0
The Chuckleberry Chive 6.75
All the Colors of the Rainbow 6.75
The Hounds 6.60
A Research note 6.00

Anonymous 371

Are you gonna take the password protection off the stories?


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That's up to Fimfiction. I submitted the anthology to be made public this morning. I'll send one of the moderators another message.

!!Spike 374

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>I'll send one of the moderators another message.
That won't be necessary. Password protection only applies to stories that aren't public.

Author of "The Chuckleberry Chive" 375

Wait, is the voting over?

Fucking shit. :(

author of: the hounds 376

yep. I feel sorry for the author of spar day though; 8 thousand words and not a vote. Guess perople aren't into "long" fics.

Anonymous 377

Well, it only says "panel voting begins" today, does the public voting continue? We could/should extend it a bit.. I sent an email to EqD and they said they'd put it in the roundup that the writing part of the contest was finished and the fics were up for reading/voting.

Author of "All the Colors of the Rainbow" 378

Oh crap. I never voted. I figured that like the PC write-offs, the public voting would be for a week. Well, I missed it. I'll still read the entries and give short reviews.

Author of "The Retelling" 379


w-wait, i voted on all of them

What went wrong?

author of: "the hounds" 380

I voted on them all too. didn't think it was a problem.

Anonymous 381

It looks like you can still vote, so I did. Why not, right.

Anonymous 382

so far the ones who keep having the most views are
the hounds and the retelling of myths and legends.

Author of "The Chuckleberry Chive" 383

Being more accustomed to the ponychan writeoffs, I figured we'd have until Saturday if not Sunday to finish everything. I simply haven't had the time this week. But there's a three day weekend ahead of me, so have all my reviews!

Cautionary Tale: What is with the weird paragraph formatting? Is that intentional? Well, this kind of quits before it gets anywhere. The fairy tale storytelling approach really does it no favors, either. Not enough is explained, and too little is left to the imagination.

Spar Day: Nice weather report! Okay, it's Rainbow Dash, I get it. Also Rarity is shallow and somewhat homophobic, and thinks poorly of her friends. In fact, it hardly feels like Rarity and Rainbow are friends at all in this. She's horribly characterized, not to mention the writing is very telly, and this just is not a good setup for a ship in the least. I feel bad, because a lot of work obviously went into this, it being the longest fic in the contest, but it doesn't seem to have paid off in the least.

All The Colors of the Rainbow: Normally I'd chafe at the sheer number of cameos in this, but I think they were all handled fairly well, even Photo Finish and her continuous spouting of catchphrases. Good lord but that picture is adorable. Nice ending, if a bit contrived, but the point gets across well. I can't help but feel this is missing something, but that might just be due to the time constraints.

The Hounds: The narrator reveal is extremely clunky. I really could have done without it. The narration voice has some issues, some breaks that don't feel intentional, or at least could have been used better, like "I don’t care for the flies and maggots, the more the merrier." It just doesn't sound right. Mostly, the stream of consciousness gets a little too coherent at times, and that's when things become telling instead of showing, and we all know about that. A lot of the things she rambles about come across far better. The part where she's writing the name is the most gripping sequence of this entire thing, leaving me quite paranoid. More like that would have made this excellent, but for now it stands as merely ambitious. (As an aside, I had to go look up the name: excellent use of crossover to explain a character trait, but it doesn't work if you're not familiar with the source, sadly! I would love to see this refined later.)

A Research Note: The concept of the 'hook' is very important to writing. Had I not been reading this with a purpose, dedicated to finishing it, I'd have stopped after that opening dialogue. "Assification" made me laugh. I hope that wasn't intentional. This story seems like much ado about nothing, though. I could almost accuse Twilight of holding the Idiot Card, though I'm not sure that phrase actually applies in this case. But that scene with Rarity, it's just continually the same thing being said again and again. Same with Spike wanting to nap. I really just have to wonder what the point of the whole thing was.

The Retelling of Myths and Legends: Now that's how you start a story. I love where this went, too, with the Countess actually showing up. What a grand idea. The continued attack count keeps that scene dire. The fight scene could perhaps be expanded nevertheless. That is so hardly an ending, though. This definitely suffers the curse of the first draft, and anything I could offer could easily be bundled under "Just work on it some more", but I very much enjoyed this and, if anything, would like to see more. This could make a splendid first chapter(s) of a longer work.

I'll a give top 3, since there's so few entries to choose from:
1) The Retelling of Myths and Legends
2) The Hounds
3) All the Colors of the Rainbow

Anonymous 385

>it's september 1
>event finishes september 4
where them reviews at?

SarfTheMagnifico !wggeWu9bgQ 386

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September 4th was tentative, I would like to add.

And the reviews will be published along with the announcement of the winner.

!!Spike ## Mod 387

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Added links to stories and voting to OP as told. You might want to add the voting link to the compilation post on FIMFiction, too.

Reviews, part 1 Author of "All the Colors of the Rainbow" 389

As promised. I won't bother spoilering, because if you haven't read them by now, chances are you're not going to.

Cautionary Tale
Okay, I know this one wasn't done seriously, but anyway… Some interesting imagery, but very telly overall, and I was never sure what was really going on. Who is in the ships? Ponies? They're not predatory, so I don't know why they'd be fishing. It's also not clear why the sea ponies, as intelligent as they are, would be enticed by the hooks. Short fic, short review. Bottom line: you beat your friend to the finish line.

Spar Day
Some formatting and mechanical issues, but nothing overwhelming.
>found herself in an unknown pony’s embrace
I expect the next sentence to follow from this, either that she literally is being hugged, or that she's enthralled with someone. However, we just go back to her musings. It feels very out of place.

Hm. We're certainly hit over the head quite a lot here. A little subtlety goes a long way. Not only with Rarity being oddly dense about everything that's happening, but also with the heavy innuendo, which I can't tell if it's supposed to be humorous, and the show-versus-tell.

Alright, the last line was a nice twist. But the whole thing felt like a joke played out too long. We're hit over the head with it the entire time, and it would have been better to play it more subtly. Part of the problem is Rarity's constant inner monologue. We're getting exposition dumped on us every so often that way, sometimes in a talking-heads fashion (speech without any action to break it up, so that the speakers may as well be statues), and it's stiff dialogue at that. Direct thoughts aren't that easy to do well. Nobody speaks to themselves in their own head that formally, so it comes across as inauthentic. The writing quality is actually pretty good here, and the characterizations were on, except that Rarity was a bit too much of the conspiracy theorist. I can accept playing it that way for the comedic effect, though. Dash actually was stealing friends, though. She did convince Fluttershy to abandon the spa appointment, and that was never really resolved.

The Chuckleberry Chive
Wat? Pinkie's Tigger now? I can't say I'd ever expect Twilight to say "freaking." Yipe. That musical number… Sight gags like that don't really translate to writing well. Okay, the Daring Do novel is going a bit too far. Those couldn't have reasonably existed for that long, so are chuckleberries a pretty recent phenomenon, or was ther no cure before them? Twilight's awfully sure that these bushes are not real, based on one book. She's not going to even attempt to research it any further than that? High-society Pinkamena? That's new… That triffid problem was resolved awfully quickly.

That was pretty well-written. Just a minor amount of mechanical errors.Something felt off, though. Pinkie's not really one for artifice, so I don't really see her pulling off that act just to teach someone a lesson. Granted, she kind of did that with Mare-Do-Well, but she wasn't the instigator. And curious that you brought up the parasprites incident, because the story felt quite like a re-imagining of that episode, except… Pinkie was wrong. I don't know what the lesson is here. Trust when your friend is worried about something irrational because she might be right about something else with a tenuous connection? I didn't get a strong theme to tie it all together, but it was a nice, silly, random story.

Reviews, part 2 Author of "All the Colors of the Rainbow" 390

The Hounds
A few mechanical problems, and some inconsistent formatting. I have surprisingly little to say about this one. To even begin knowing what's supposed to be happening here, one must either google that term or already have a knowledge of Lovecraft. And as a fan of Lovecraft myself, I have to say it didn't really create that feel for me. There were some creepy moments, but the outcome was one of two painfully obvious possibilities, and several of the scenes could have been eliminated without detracting from the story at all. The ending in particular didn't strike me as Lovecraftian at all, as it snapped out to a third-person perspective, rather than having the narrator somehow gain knowledge of what had happened, since he was still alive. In particular, Lovecraft pays a great deal of attention to the setting, and I never got any sense of foreboding from even the little bit of physical description we got. While the writing itself was good, and certainly this story may well connect with another reader, I just didn't get out of it what I was clearly supposed to see.

A Research Note
Fairly telly right from the beginning, but fairly mechanically clean. You're jumping between characters here, which can be disorienting.
>The only noticeable part was the gold printing, and how damaged it was.
So the only noticeable part was… two noticeable parts?
Spike's characterization seems off. He's usually eager to help except in cases like Winter Wrap-Up, where he was out of his routine, forced to get up early. Ooh, spoke to soon. Bunch of phrasing/missing word/repetition problems a short way in. It's odd that the book gets more damaged the further in she goes. In ordinary cases, damage would proceed from the outside in.
This is either a horrible, horrible pun or a very unfortunate typo.
Why wouldn't Twilight have researched the book's source early on? She might have found other related publications or another copy. It's apparently common, since Redheart recognized it immediately. It doesn't seem like her. Kind of a cute character study of Twilight, but not enough of it rings true.

The Retelling of Myths and Legends
What, pray tell, is a "scantum?" Really the only mechanical errors I'm catching are typos that whatever word processing program you use should have noted for you. Twilight and Dash sound accurate enough, but I'm not getting Pinkie's vibe at all. I facepalmed. Hard. You know exactly where. It's out of character with the rest of the fic, I'm really surprised it doesn't violate the contest rules. You had some pretty highbrow humor going up to this point, and it's like finding a diarrhea joke in the middle of an episode of "Frazier."

You're wavering between direct and indirect thoughts, which is akin to wavering between a limited and an omniscient narrator. It's disorienting. A few grating instances of passive voice, and it gets very telly in places.

I didn't get the ending at all. Why would all of those ponies rush back into the theater at the end of the fight? When you mention "The first thing she wrote," I assume you mean the first thing she wrote that night. Though I had to allow that you meant the first thing she ever wrote in that journal (which I would then have to ask how she remembered, since the oldest pages were missing), implying that perhaps Starswirl had gone so deeply into cover and been able to cheat death in such a way that he actually had reincarnated himself as Twilight without any memory of doing so. The flowery language actually works for me here because it's appropriate to the character under focus (Twilight), the venue (a theater), and the scenario (a match-up of intellectuals). That's exactly when purple is okay, as long as it's not overdone to the point that it alienates too many readers. Pay attention to the small-scale pacing, though. When the action level is high, that's when you should keep the language a bit simpler and use shorter, clipped sentences to aid the feeling of events occurring rapidly. When there's slowly building tension, or you're at the peak of the action and want to draw it out, that's the time for your longer sentences to make things feel more suspended.

Author, "Retelling" 391


I definitely want to talk to you about my fic, since you've picked up on some good things, but I have a quick question.

What's that about violating the rules?

Author, "Retelling" 392


I guess I'll do responses to things, since I'm here.

I realize Pinkie's a little out of character. I don't want to play her as strict-canon looney tunes Pinkie, though. She has this positive energy that shows in the way she deals with the extras, and she wants her friends to get alone, so she's foolish enough to give Twilight a chance, thinking she'll be able to broker a compromise.

I generally hate direct thoughts, but I used them in one little part where Twilight definitely had an internal monologue going ("She cut me off!")

On to the ending.

I don't know if anypony's caught the inspiration for the Countess' cynicism yet, but maybe somepony will once I paste this:

They looked to me once, now they turn to you
Do you understand now, do you see that the truth is
They don't want to change this, they don't want a hero
They just want a martyr, a statue to raise

I've given everything I can
there are no heroes left in man.

The crowd barges in to prove her wrong about that, perhaps because they weren't going to just count on Celestia coming to save the day.

If I were to do it again, I would make it so that Twilight fails and a background pony (maybe Time Turner) saves her life. The reader is confused for a few sentences, and then the crowd floods in. So it's not Twilight who defeats the Countess, it's the goodness of ponykind itself.

The original idea for the ending was that Twilight would suddenly feel a surge of power that gave her the edge to defeat the Countess. Starswirl somehow saved her. Then the crowd barges in. Maybe readers would catch the sneaky connection, maybe not. That angle didn't come through, because I half-assed it and was too afraid of getting heavy-hoofed with it.

The ending with the Countess and her diary? Sorry that it didn't come through. Maybe a rewrite will make the joke clearer: The Countess is writing NEW wild misconceptions about Starswirl based on the battle with Twilight. In another thousand years, the diary will be found again, and Starswirl's legend will get even more twisted. If Starswirl has reincarnated himself, it's not as Twilight.
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Author of "Cautionary Tale" 393

Awww. Well, since you're the first one to say something a tad positive about my rush job, I'll clarify some things.

First, this is a prologue told from the perspective of the Seaponies, so they wouldn't know why they were being fished. Also, those hooks were widespread and some Seaponies got caught simply from there being so many, but I can understand. Maybe I should've thrown in some nets as well.

As for indepth explanations, those were ponies on the ships, and they were fishing the Seaponies for their blood. Seapony blood has enhanced curative properties, so at some point fishermen decided to go all-out in hunting them down and sell them to seedy doctors and medicine makers. Admittedly at first the boats that appeared were simply transport and cargo ships, but the ones with the hooks were fishing vessels that just so happened to catch a Seapony or two. Once word of their value and existence got out, Diamond Dogs got in on it as well, leading to some of the maiming as well as the blood loss.

Of course, as it was from the Seapony point of view, they didn't know these things, and being a prologue, the reader wouldn't learn of these details until much later. But since you've been so nice, there's your explanation. Have a good day, and thanks for understanding ;)

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I would like to note that the final judgement and reviews will be finished in a couple days. They will not be ready by tomorrow.

Reason being that there is a lot of material to read, and considering how relatively under-staffed we are, it needs time.

Author, "Retelling" 396


I didn't realize until now that I got top score! That's nice to know, though the score spread was so narrow and the voter pool was so tiny that it doesn't actually matter.

Seriously, I didn't even think I was in the same league as "The Chuckleberry Chive" or "All the Colors of the Rainbow." I'm glad my late-night masochism paid off!

Author of "The Chuckleberry Chive" 397

No, I think you definitely outdid me. :)


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Well, with Sarf still waiting for all the judging results to come in, have some updated voting stats.
With 7 votes on each story, here are the current standings:

The Retelling of Myths and Legends 7.20
All the Colors of the Rainbow 6.83
The Chuckleberry Chive 6.83
The Hounds 6.25
A Research Note 5.71
Spar Day 5.29
Cautionary Tale 4.43

I'll release the Author names later when the judging is complete. Have fun guessing, if you want to.

Author, "Retelling" 399

I can't remember who mentioned to me in IRC that they were entering, and I don't know most of the people who said here that they're entering, and I already got the one easy ID…

I would almost want to call out either Chuckleberry Chive or All the Colors as being Golden Vision, but I'm fairly certain he didn't enter. Maybe one of them was a stealthy Pascoite entry.

As for myself, I've given myself away a couple of times, and I think my style is rather distinctive.

Pascoite!uxy6g7ov9I 400

>a stealthy Pascoite entry

Author of "The Chuckleberry Chive" 402

A perfect tie for second place! That's exciting!

Cause to Celebrate! Author of "Cautionary Tale" 405

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HYES! Last place in a write-off contest, I am truly the worst writer!


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Author of "The Retelling" 407

man i'm just flipping all my jimmies over here

it's wednesday, dudebros. what's up?

Bleeding Rain!DROPScczL2 409

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Sorry, we're still waiting for Sarf to collect and consolidate the judges' ratings. I'm not sure where he's at, but just be patient.

SarfTheMagnifico !wggeWu9bgQ 411

My deepest sympathies. My personal life alongside 8-hour work days has just been killing me lately.

I apologize sincerely. When I can get them done, they will be done.

The Results! Bleeding Rain!DROPScczL2 426

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Okay, sorry we’re late guys. We finally got the reviews all sorted out, here is your winner:

“All the Colors of the Rainbow” by Pascoite, with an average final score of 136.5 wins first prize.

Here’s the others:

The Chuckleberry chive 113 Present Perfect
A Research Note 111 Static Shock
The Retelling of Myths and Legends 103 Kazu
The Hounds 81.5 TrelaTyraelis
Spar Day 79 D0gFood
Cautionary Tale 57.5 Compendium of Steve

There you have it. Hope you all had fun. Here’s the Story ratings by the judges, if you want to know: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1VWKQtOWGGcjHJ4PduKeQE7NZOl9UDDlOd_2yxYfJyoM/edit
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Tactical 427

Huh, when did I give the name Kazu?

Anyway, I wrote "Retelling."

I don't want to call it out specifically, but I find it hard to express how strongly I disagree with what happened. This has nothing to do with personal bias. I actually think that some of the judging was flat out OBJECTIVELY INCORRECT. An entry that I really liked took first prize though, so I have no problem with the results.

Would be good if I could talk to whoever considers themselves the main organizer about my butthurt but I feel you may be able to tell for yourself what it is.

If you would like to hear from me after all, find me on IRC. I'm there pretty often.

One more thing. The last judge's stuff got cut off after 2 entries.
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Tactical 428


You know what? I changed my mind. I want to say this.

The second reviewer gave Pascoite a 10 out of 30 for grammar. Sorry, but "my reading level is too low for these sentence structures" is not a reason to call the grammar bad. In fact, there are several examples of the second judge giving bad scores for similar reasons.

This is, of course, only one of the issues I have, but I think it is the clearest. Again, grab me on Canternet's #fic channel.

Anonthony!EEEEEEEE2c 429

I'd held off from requesting to be one of the judges in order to keep it user-run, but I do wish I'd been on the panel now. All in all a wonderful contest and for our first board event a nicely satisfying outcome but there are many places we can improve.


In all honesty, I don't think I deserved that much. The generous overuse of commas in the review gave me a laugh; it's something I've been trying to get rid of for a long time now. I don't suppose there's any idea of when (if?) the next prompt will be given?

Bleeding Rain!DROPScczL2 431

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It was the name on your Google account when you sent me the .txt

Sarf was the main organizer, but you could call me his partner in crime for the whole thing. The third judge, Bariah, only got to the two fics he reviewed, and Sarf never ended up submitting his. Basically, we derped. Hard. We apologize for any flankhurt we may have caused, and we're just going to have to be better prepared next time. Everypony had fun writing right?

Yep, we do plan to do this again, although we'll definitely be tightening a few ropes on our end on round two.
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Author of "The Retelling" 432

Okay, that's… illuminating.

Well, here's hoping the next time is fun too.

Formal apology. Staff 433

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To the finalists of the MLPchan fan fiction contest i offer my sincere apologies.

I am not educated enough to be a judge in any form of written word contest.

I am not fit to tell others where they need to improve if i am unable to do any better myself.

For my inability to give a fair and decent review of others work i sincerely apologize.

I meant no hard feelings or disrespect of others work.

It is well within your rights if you should continue to feel upset or hurt because of what i have said or done.

Have a nice day.



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Congrats, Pascoite. See how easy it is for you when you don't have me as competition?

I kid, I kid. Also I think you've beaten me in every round of mine you've entered.

If you guys are planning on hosting more events, I suggest having my website handle the submissions. It's still in development, but I'm planning on it being done soon—in time for my next write-off on Ponychan.

You can track progress at https://github.com/RogerDodger/WriteOff

Anonthony has also given me permission to host it on MLPchan's server (which means there's no worry of it going down just because my home's Internet is pooped).

Reasons to use it:
- Everything automated
- Users can preview/edit their submissions (so long as the deadline isn't passed)
- Stories are viewable on site, so it doesn't matter if Fimfiction goes down*
- Prompts are selected by a system inspired by Facemash (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Facemash#Facemash)

*That said, I still suggest putting them up on Fimfiction, because I have no intention of implementing a commenting system. Likewise, there's no intention of the site being used for commenting on the event, as the event thread in the respective board fulfils that purpose.

If there are any particular features of such a site you'd like, now would be a good time to let me know.

Tactical 435


As the guy who can be directly blamed for this post, I'd like to say that I'm sure nobody has any trouble forgiving you. You didn't do anything bad to anyone.

It just kinda shouldn't have… you know, shouldn't have happened.

Present!PeRFeCt9JM 436

Whoo second! :D Pasco's fic is not the one I thought would beat me, but I'm okay with this. I had a good time working on my fic (as time has progressed, I see more spots where it needs work, but I'm still pleased with how it turned out for a first/second draft) and it was likewise fun breaking in a new site's first writeoff. :3 I'm gonna take a moment to respond to the judges, because I do that.

Bleeding Raindrops: Thanks for that comment about Fluttershy being like Applejack, that's very observant. I'll explore that in rewrites and maybe it'll be a way to get her into the story! I am slightly miffed at the claim that the link to the prompt was tenuous, given that I chose this idea because it's based around two or three separate misconceptions.

Staffcarguy: The hotel guy was kind of Canadian, hence 'aboot'. Not sure why I did that, thinking about changing it. That's a massive dock for grammar though. D: And yeah, I need to work on the moral, because I sort of lost track of what it actually was while writing.

Bariah: Ouch.

Sorry you guys had so many problems this time around. Take it to heart as a learning experience and figure out what you can do better next time. :) I'll be looking forward to it!

Anonymous 437

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>checks results of writeoff

Holy shit, where did you find these judges? I'm laughing for real right now.

Damn, and people think the pre-readers are biased and arbitrary.

SarfTheMagnifico !wggeWu9bgQ 438

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I would just like to point out that after this event, I have fired half of my staff.

I apologize for the unprofessionalism, but being the first time around I had to work out the kinks. For next time I know three things

1)Schedule more judging time
2)Hire twice the staff
3)Screen the staff members upon application

I was cut short of my staff as it was, and one was hired a week before the event when someone else quit on me. I apologize for the screw-ups, but know that the final decision for winner was unanimous.

Pascoite!uxy6g7ov9I 439

"Wings of Icarus" beat "Curse, Bless Me Now," as I recall.

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