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Minific Write-off Round #3 6342[View]

Accolades: http://writeoff.rogerdodger.me/scoreboard
Overview: http://writeoff.rogerdodger.me/event/17-Minific-Contest-3

Starts Sun, 23 Jun 02:00 UTC. 400–750 word limit. 24 hours of writing time. 7 days of public voting.

For those of you unfamiliar with the write-off, here's the gist:

– Participants write stories over a given time period
– The stories are written from a prompt decided at the event’s onset
– Participants submit their work to an anonymous anthology
– Readers then rate the stories
– Finally, everything gets wrapped up with author reveals and winners announced

Good luck,
Roger out
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Reviews, part 2 6573

Marry Me:
Pipsqueak X Dinky, or what’s left of her.

I think I understand what’s happening here, but not too completely. I suspect that Pip’s old, and Dinky’s dead. And that makes the whole premise, well, damn creepy.
But the main problem I have is that there isn’t really anything happening in the story. It’s just a long, rambling monologue that doesn’t really evoke any emotion. The descriptions are concrete, but not particularly interesting. I guess that that’s the real problem with the story: nothing’s happening.

Berry Punch reminiscences.

The narrative voice was weird: it felt purple without using any particularly purplish words. There isn’t much to plot here besides an collection of bad things designed to elicit sympathy for Berry. But it doesn’t work.
I do believe that one can go blind from bad alcohol (living where I do, that tends to appear on the news). But who would give an alcoholic a job composing wine menus? Unless that’s because of Berry’s nebulous cutie mark talent.
In the end, it’s simply not interesting. The prose doesn’t catch the eye, and the plot is non-existant.

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Ion-Sturm 6576

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Well, that was far from my greatest showing.

Gah, dialogue is usually my strongest aspect.

Twilight's changes were meant to be the tone of the letters

It was a yearly remembrance for Twilight to make letters to their friend and Spike to send them to, well, wherever they were now.

>{why is he king? Why isn't Celestia there? When is this happening? What happened to her friends?)
Arguably doesn't matter in the context of the story. She's passed on (I subscribe to the "there can only be two alicorns" Faust theory). Dead.

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Present!PeRFeCt9JM 6580

FFFFFFFFFFFF @[email protected]

I'm so glad people liked that one. :D Which is weird, because it seemed to be getting the most average reaction from the reviewers here. (I figured Chance Encouter would do better, given the reaction.) Thank you!

And NTSTS got robbed, if you ask me. :B

Contest: Through the Looking Glass 6537[View]

What with summer coming on, I figured it was about time that our tired old site actually did something for once…hence, Bronystate is holding a fanfiction contest!

The short form of the rules: you're to write a one-shot story, minimum 2000 words, about how you think Equestria Girls will play out - or, if you've seen it already, how you think it /should/ have played out. Top three entries will have a choice of three prizes: one Steam game under $20, a free commission courtesy of the talented Chobibi, or getting any line they please red in the voice of their favourite pony (fan VAs, details negotiable with one Scoot-Scootaloo). All entries should be mailed to [email protected] as an attachment compatible with Word 2010 or under. You are also allowed to include a link to your Fimfic, Fanfic, or whatever page if you please. Please also note in your e-mail whether you use British, Canadian, or American spellings.

Contest runs until midnight July 6th, 2013. For the long version of the contest description, please visit the following page:


#contest #fanfiction #prizes #bronystate
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Anonymous 6540

Me too! And non-sarcastically!

Anonymous 6543

And good riddance for that.


Yes, cause clearly someone who hated the movie is going to have the drive to write an amazing fanfic about it.

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FimFiction /fic/ Group 5834[View]

As some of you may have noticed, I’ve recently set up a group for /fic/ on FimFiction.net (link: http://www.fimfiction.net/group/198766/fic). The idea originally came up in the IRC as part of a discussion on declining activity on /fic/ (on both MLPChan and Ponychan), especially in terms of “new blood” and its introduction into the community. It’s true that /fic/ is a very insular community, and that we tend to be quite…intimidating to newcomers. It’s also true that even the “EqD rejects” tend to either avoid /fic/ due to reputation, or else out of simple laziness or lack of comprehension of the formatting of a ‘chan board. So, I made the group on FimFiction with the intention of making us more accessible to the fanfiction “public” (or, as Ion would say, the potato-less masses).

This thread is to foster ideas, planning, and general discussion as to the purpose, structure, and activity of a /fic/ group on FimFiction. If you like the idea, then welcome. If you don’t, then you’re welcome too—just make sure to tell us why you think it’s a crap concept. To begin, I’ll list a few facts and questions to start discussion off in here.

1.) The /fic/ community is quite small, isolated, and possibly shrinking.
Again, we can be quite intimidating, and most EqD rejections don’t even come here, let alone stick around after they’ve gotten their TG review. We also tend to lose quite a few reviewers to burnout, hiatus, or simple ascension (EqD).

2.) /fic/ (as a chan board) doesn’t have the best reputation or presence on the Internet.
The logic behind this new group, therefore, is to both increase people’s knowledge of /fic/ as a resource, as well as to raise awareness of our competency. This, hopefully, will also improve our reputations, as well as to attract writers who would otherwise be driven away by MLPChan and Ponychan’s infamy (and difficulty of use, which is evidently a major issue).

3.) The boards are quite, quite dead.
That’s not to say that nothing is happening, but business is much slower than it was before the move, and even before that, it wasn’t really much of anything compared to some other boards. The number of reviewers is dwindling, but so is the number of submitting writers.

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Do you think we'd get more traffic if we switched to using the Fimfiction group exclusively?

Anonymous 6506

It would help if the operations worked there and mirrored it. Don't know if abandoning this place would make a difference.

Then again, /fic/ is no single place, so it might not matter if you move.

Tactical!fRainBOoMw 6511

I PROMISE I'll send in a blurb for me as a reviewer, and I"ll make an OP for my thread, and all that kinda stuff


It would help if I didn't have this weird glitch keeping me from typing in the password field.

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Amazon start publishing licensed fanfiction 5552[View]

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Anonymous 6485

what im not seeing, is a list of ALL the worlds they accept stories for


Pretty Little Liars, The Vampire Diaries, and Gossip Girl

Anonymous 6492

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In addition to those Azu mentioned:
From http://www.fool.com/investing/general/2013/06/22/amazons-kindle-worlds-just-got-bigger.aspx -
>For now, though, Valiant's agreement with Amazon gives fan-fiction writers the rights to create and sell their own works based only on the comic book series Bloodshot, X-O Manowar, Archer & Armstrong, Harbinger, and Shadowman, "with more to be added at a later date." In addition, it includes Howey's Silo Saga, Eisler's John Rain novels, Crouch's Wayward Pines Series, and the Foreworld Saga.

What I'm worried about is that the terms of service. Even if MLP ever got on that platform (which I doubt it will) the ToS are probably highly author-unfriendly. Better that we just ape ancient mythology and try to sell it to a real publisher than try to ape a trademarked IP and put it on Kindle Worlds.

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Scootaloo's Father's Day #Story LiamNeighson!ju.ggVLh9k 6435[View]


Just looking for some feedback on my story I wrote for the EQD FlashFic #3. I am hoping to get it posted on EQD so any help I can get to polish it up before the pre-readers get to it would be appreciated!


Edit: Oops, my bad!


Synopsis: It's Father's Day in Ponyville and Scootaloo doesn't have a father to give a presentation at school, again. Scootaloo's friends get together to help her enjoy the holiday without feeling left out. And with a bit of divine intervention, she has the best Father's Day yet.

Genre: Slice of Life #Slice of Life

Characters: Everypony #Everypony (Mane 6, CMC, Celestia, OC's, Other)
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Rodinga !vL.TDTGrPw 6451

Or playing the "Song of Sturms"

Doom doom doooom, doom doom doooom, doooom do doom doom doom.

Anonymous 6457

Is that like the normal song of Storms, but with more implied buggering?


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Good FanFics Anonymous 5924[View]

Any recommendations. One-shot, FoE ,Longer than Long Dick Johnson's Penis, doesn't matter.Just something really good. Its hard finding things on FimFic that aren't on the featured page that are good.
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>what are some of the outward signs of a good fic?
The biggest grab for me is honestly a good cover pic, but I guess that only really works for EqD readers though.

>What do you guys look for first when seeing a fic (e.g. its title, rating, characters, tags, synopsis)? Which of these holds the most sway over your choice to read the fic?

I personally never look at the synopsis unless the story is incomplete. With over four-hundred stories on my read it later list, I don't tend to read stories that aren't on EqD unless a friend recommends them or it's by an author that's written something I really liked. But I suppose who's in it and what genre it is has some influence on whether I read right away or drop it in my ever growing read it later list.

>Will you put a fic down after the first sentence? Paragraph? Chapter? Or would you put one down even later?

For older ones, I might put it down after the first paragraph, but for newer ones, I give it about two screens usually.


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>With over four-hundred stories on my read it later list


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Yeah, it wasn't as much of a problem back during Season 3 when I was clearing out almost five stories a day.

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/fic/ Digest 556[View]

#Publication#Discussion#We're Back, Baby

Welcome, one and all, to my humble abode. Here roam zombies and your humble necromancer, who has taken much delight in their quickening.

I have visited the empty ruins of the middling /fic/, and have found its wonders plentiful. But the temples of the ancients’ wisdom lie hidden under the sands of time, darkened forever to the world. The goal of this thread is to dig into that loamy cemetery—the final resting place these great repositories of knowledge—and produce from the rotting loins of those glorious ancients a palatable summation of issues to facilitate discussion. It is a shame to see many a gem buried when its life has concluded, never to be seen again save maybe by the chance spam bot. I plan to rectify this, and this seems a time good as any to do it.
In order to avoid unnecessary necroing, I ask everyone to keep within this thread when discussing and replying to the threads or topics. Let the Old Ones rest in peace.

Once I have surveyed a thread of suitable content, I shall write a digest of it, and post it here.

I do not promise to be unbiased.

I do not promise to contextualize the topic at hand.

I do not promise to be historically accurate.
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I haven't forgotten about this, but boy is it hard to muster up any kind of enthusiasm to produce anything. With that fic I've picked up in the training grounds and the Write-Off coming up, I might have to put this on the back-burner for another week or so.

I am so lazy.


Locked at OPs request. Just let me know when you want to re-open, dolfeus.

ALIVE! 6368

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By a few weeks I meant seven months.





This is going to be a very special edition of /fic/ Digest, for today we are looking at primordial /fic/ (aka /st/). No fancy-pants stats here, just a good old glance back to see how far we truly have come.

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Anon the space anon adapted from an CYOA nuwritefriend 6228[View]

#fucking insane

You are anon well everyone's anon you were part of a colonization crew from earth you could go home at anytime.You remember your prime directive:"Find a willing native and reproduce." Most of your comrads found a native of already and have families,now it's your turn.
Be Anonymous found a particularly willing native her name Fluttershy
"Wow this equestrian is very willing I might be the fastest to find a family."
"H-h-ey anon I-i w-w-was thinking maybe you like to g-g-go on a d-d-date."
"of course miss Shy now i was thinking of several places; A fancy restrant called Le-pona,A small down to earth maybe apples,And good ole sugarcube corner ." they then go on a date "Hey flutters how bout we go to a little place called Olive garden."
"T-t-hat sounds nice just let me get dressed then."
Later at olive garden after ordeing your food you try to make small talk.So Ms.shy i am low on credits and have no job my pay hasn't come in yet and i'll be ordering the lobster." damn you're an idiot you probably screwed the whole thing up but she must be willing the mate with you or else >kill "T-t-thats ok anon I'll pay,no need to worry." "Thank you ms.Shy." your food finally arrives before you sink into the pit anymore" Your lobster is cooked right and her chef meat free salad looks good too. You both dig in using your excellanctant silverware and her using hooves.You have a good dinner and you fell happy." you drop her off in your Ponedon land speeder. Now since the night is young you have choices to make. you decide to take her to the street races
" Wait ms.shy the night is still young maybe we could go for a ride ? "
"O-oh anon what about ang""you can bring angel if you want but I don't recommend it ." "alright then."
You drive her to the spot here the races take place, both pony and human alike are there then you go up to the registry "Hello sir i would like to enter my speeder into one of your races." alright we have 9 races going then
You decide to take the 25 mile race with rainbow and cloud
You load the specially anon race mix into your speeder
You lock fluttershy up since no hands
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nuwritefriend 6235

It was not a greentext here a link to the story

nuwritefriend 6236

Make sure to read it with the music


IonSturm, why you always an unfunny faggot that refuses to quit?

Cherry Berrys google glass adventure Darkedge42 5981[View]


this is a story of Cherry Berry, when she gets a parcel delivered she opens it to find a google glass, but this google glass lets her see invisible creatures and gives her powers depending on how she uses the device

for those of you who dont know who Cherry Berry is, she is a random background pony i chose out of the few shown on the mlp wiki

i originally worte this fic as a short comedy but as i fleshed it out in my mind i have some key plot points in mind and am loving what ideas i have i hope you all do too, there will be light gore in future chapters

also if you didn't notice the scouter has the google logo on the visor xP

i hope to have this written and finished before the end of june

but enough talk, have at you!

enjoy :3


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Please look at the sticky'd post at the top of the page. That will explain to you what you should do if you want this to be reviewed.


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>Doesn't capitalize "i"s

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Serious Syntax Sal !S570SjDkx. 5498[View]

#Tips & Tricks #Grammar #Discussion

One day I was a writing a story about polychormatic ponies when I suddenly thought about something. I asked myself, like I'm hoping sure every author has at some point, if what I was writing was conveying exactly what I wanted it to. Being me, I overthought and spent a good thirty minutes contemplating not just the words themselves, but their ordering in the sentence, the sentence's position within the paragraph, the specific feeling I wanted the paragraph to evoke, and so on. As this went on I found myself going beyond that, to seemingly simple things like quotation marks to more complex things like the very feeling of a word.

Any English author should know there are rules to the English language. To disregard those rules not only fogs the messages, meanings, and the very story itself to the reader, but oftentimes makes it practically unbearable to the point the reader stops reading not because the story disinterests them, but because sloppy, distracting writing makes them want to stop. A fluid story is a good story; nobody wants to feel like there's a stop sign every twenty feet. To remedy this one must just keep writing and learn. The first story is predominantly the worst thing someone'll ever write, and unless one learns that will never change. Messy writing loses a reader's attention and could even lose their respect. The more fluid the writing, the clearer the window is between the reader and what the author is saying.

I've been proofreading ponyfiction for people for about a year now. I've dipped my feet in stories from a few thousand words to a few hundred thousand, and by now I'd like to think of myself as being pretty adept. I like to think that the errors I point out are the correct ones and that I hadn't missed any in my one, occasionally two passes of a document. By now, I think I've got an idea of what I'm doing but by no means do I think of myself as a professional, and I surely acknowledge that I do make mistakes in my proofreading, even if I'm not aware of them.

That all being said, I feel like sharing what I've learned over the past year in an effort to help clean that window. I'm sure even now that some of the things I identify as rules are wrong or just have rough kinks in them, but I, and I'm sure a lot of you too, would like to marginalize that as much as possible. S
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For Peace's sake, just say second person is a point of view and be done with it. This argument is completely inane otherwise.

Another Set Of Eyes Sal !S570SjDkx. 5580

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Prereading, proofreading, and editing. Perhaps you've done some of these or had it done to one of your stories. These terms have been tossed around before, often interchangibly, but one doesn't exactly mean the same thing as another. True, there are similarities between the three, but there are vast differences as well. It'd probably be best for me right now to give a breif description of each, which will then be expanded on later.

Prereading is when someone is just a prereader, meaning they read a story before anyone else, before it gets published to the masses. A prereader often gives the author tidbits of information, like what parts of a story they found interesting or just didn't like. But this information isn't necessarily helpful, and it doesn't have to nor should it be expected to.

Proofreading is when someone acts like a prereader, but they do more; instead of just reading they proofread the story for errors within the text. Whether they be grammatical, technical, or just things for the author to consider, the comments a proofreader leaves are to help the fluidy of the text, making the story clean of errors and thus easier to read before being published.

Editing is when someone goes beyond proofreading, getting themselves inside the author's head to make sure there are no faults in the story itself, not just in the text. An Editor is, in a sense, like a second author or more accurately a sub-author. Whatever an editor does often has profound influence on the story, anything from changing an ordering of events to even introducing and removing scenes or motifs. Of course everything is up to the author on whether or not any of that happens, and an editor does not do any writing themselves, nonetheless they make sure the author takes the story down its intended path and offers input for the greater good of the story being told.

I would like to go the record to say that I do not work for Equestria Daily, the Training Grounds, or whatever similar public service there is because I know I'll be bringing them up. All my proofreading and editing takes place privately within a close inner circle of friends. Nonetheless, it just about always helps for an author to get another set of eyes on whatever they're writing, if not for the writer's sake but the story being written. Any help at all is something to be thankful for, and the fact that
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Numbers 123 Sal !S570SjDkx. 5814

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Consistency. That's the big thing to remember here. Deciding whether or not to use numerals or instead spelling them out is often just a matter of style, but above all be consistent. In the literary world, generally speaking, whole numbers under 101 tend to be spelled out while those above 100 tend to be in their numeral format. In scientific journals, press releases, and newspaper, amongst other similar formats, it's prefered every whole number less than 10 be spelled out. But regardless of format, within every type of publication it's preferred to use the same numeral element in a paragraph. What this means is that if you spell out a number, one shouldn't just hop to writing the numbers themselves in the same paragraph.

>Twilight levitated fifty scrolls and seven quills.
>Twilight levitated 50 scrolls and 7 quills.

>Twilight levitated fifty scrolls and 7 quills.

There is no global write or wrong, but again, consistency is the big factor at play here. That all being said, here's some tips on how to use numbers in the literary format.

Hyphens and Numbers
Should it be written as thirteen meters or 13-meters? Rule of thumb is that when combining two or more words to form a compound adjective in front of a noun, put hyphens between these words.

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The Changing of the Guard 5730[View]

Title: The Changing of the Guard

Author: Rarity's Stallion

email address: [email protected]

Tags: [Dark]

Synopsis: After Twilight is crown by Celestia and Luna as the sole princess of Equestria and left to govern the land by herself, Equestria is thrown into an armed conflict with the Griffon Nation. While necessary measures are undertaken to ensure Equestria's security, these measures along with the war effort sew seeds of discontent. This discontent soon boils over into a full-scale revolt that threatens the very throne upon which Twilight sits.

Link (FimFiction): http://www.fimfiction.net/story/94220/the-changing-of-the-guard

Chapters to be reviewed: All posted


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>these measures along with the war effort sew seeds of discontent
>these measures, along with the war effort, sow the seeds of discontent.
A mild improvement.

soundslikeponies!bQsJPGMNfw 5733

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Y'mean to post this in a review thread, sugarcube?

Post it in the training grounds and I'll get workin' on a review of the chapters shortly. I'm feeling a mite bit spontaneous right now.
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The Rolling Game Thread Ion-Sturm 2887[View]

No long-winded OP here, folks! The idea is simple: every week, a new writing-related game will begin, with the OP being edited to reflect the new topic.
This week's feature: Song Stories
Music moves us. It can make the most stoic of men cry, the least happy people dance, and the most dull individual inspired.

Find a song you like and write a short scene or story to it.

Challenge Mode: For every minute of music, write one-hundred words, give-or-take 10% of the total as flex-space.
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Already a thread for that.
Could use some love.
This one is more about silly fun than flexing our literary muscles.


So should I start?


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No one else has put forward an idea (that isn't already covered by another thread), so go ahead.

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Previous thread >>120

Welcome, one and all, to the new and improved review thread of moi. As you can see from that fancy thing up above, name’s Figments.

Now, I’m not one for long-winded intros or some crazy things like that, so I’m just gonna get to straight to the point: allow me to help you help us all, but as you can see, I need your help to do just that.

I do have a few requirements for posting in this thread. Consider them just guidelines, ‘cause sometimes I won’t even enforce them if I’m in the right mood (which never happens).

1) Please read the sticky before posting. I’d hate to be the bearer of bad news if you miss something important.

2) Please adhere to the Standard Fic Posting Structure, or SFPS for short. This includes a space for each of the following: Title, Author, Appropriate Tags, Synopsis, Word Count, and the Link.

3) I only accept GDocs or MS Word Web App files. I do not even glance at FimFic links, and if you post those, you’re getting ignored.

4) Please submit only one chapter at a time. I don’t want people dumping 100k fics in 20 different parts for me to go through. Even a single chapter that's got more words than story wastes my time. So just keep them as short as possible.
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FullmetalPony 4865

Ah the red ink! It bur… well, it's not too bad. I think I'll be re-writing the opening a bit to drive home that Pound is the protagonist.

Not much comment on the plot though other than the lack of emotion. Pound needs some work clearly, but what about the other characters?

A Heavy Crown FullmetalPony 5581

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Author: Fullmetal Pony

Tags: Sad, Slice of Life, Romance

Synopsis (trying out a new one here): A unicorn with wings. There have been only two ponies of such nature. A third has now come into existence, but the weight of royalty may be too much to bear.
Chapter 1:https://docs.google.com/document/d/1L-YDdQXu-NGrZZWzXeQU3GT5MeYb3GMjghxTAcDIGmY/edit

Chapter 2: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1zi7PtM08177Ut_E9bJGnMs9HJ8OgJGuRztSrO78ocF8/edit

Word Count: 6213

Figments--WithoutMyTrip 5677

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I … I have no idea how to process this right now. I shouldn't even be able to write up a review for you, FMP. I literally have no idea what to think about any of this—the story, the characters. Mind you, not in a bad way.

…Just, hear me out.

Plot & Storytelling

I was given two chapters. Around six-thousand total words. Which, in all honesty, is pretty small for what I usually see, but it doesn't ruin things overall, per say. However, one thing I can tell you is that you definitely need to expand this more.

Let's start with Chapter One.

Okay, so we have an “Aria” and a “Willows” waking up to find that “Aria's” water broke (because in this universe, we ALWAYS start with pregnancy scenes). So my first thought is, “Hey, I have absolutely no idea what the heck is going on.” And that, I think, is the biggest problem you have. Sure, you have a flowing—albeit erratically—storyline progression, and I could follow it, but I really had no idea what was going on.

In the sense that, why am I reading this and why should I care.
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Azusa's Review Thread: Magical Lesbian Edition 4825[View]


Stay awhile, and listen.

Next month will be the anniversary of when I started seriously reviewing pony fic, so I decided to start a review thread. I've reviewed around 25 stories on The Training Grounds.

Read Me
>Use Google Documents if you want more than a tl;dr review.

>I reserve the right to review only the first chapter of a multi-chapter story if it has more than sentence level problems.

>I am willing to review non-pony fiction if your story seems interesting.

>Bug me in the #fic IRC channel on Canternet if you feel that I'm taking too long. Link: http://derpy.me/TFaOm

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Review acknowledgement 5340


Thanks for the reviews!

Sure, I might throw Chapter Four in here once I'm done with it :)

It am I again 5671

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Hey there, Azusa! Remember me? Probably not.
I just wanted to tell you that you an add another story to your "Stories I've reviewed that made it to EqD" pile: http://www.equestriadaily.com/2013/05/story-jericho.html

Thanks for all the help you once gave me, mate!


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Ah! Yes, I almost forgot. When I saw this on EqD, it sounded familiar, but I couldn't quite remember.

Also, Compendium of Steve has gotten two stories on the blog that I've reviewed. I would edit the op to include them, but I lost my password when I got a new PC.
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/101054/for-the-craft ←-Why doesn't this have more views?

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War of the Poets 5470[View]

The Submission Round is now complete. All poems can be found at https://docs.google.com/document/d/1oFEd3FSL3kUfNzVF9INCBSWVZPbk-2i3uT-LWlbzIDw. Voting begins Wednesday, May 22nd at 5 AM GMT.

The Voting Round has begun! Vote here: https://docs.google.com/forms/d/1PK-MBpZrMhLFoDSjXEyXAs-Xf5C81QhHW-zeBxZ9uJI/viewform. It ends Saturday, May 25th, at 5 AM GMT.

Let us play a game.
Come on now; it will be fun.
The best poet wins.

So I proposed the other day in the IRC a rather unique idea. We've all participated in writeoffs before, whether for longer fics, drabbles, or other little tidbits, but to my knowledge we've never had a competition that channels the spirit of rhyme and meter.

So! I propose that we have a Poetry Writeoff—a "War of the Poets," if you will. There seemed to be some interest on the IRC when I brought it up, so I hope it gets some participation. What are the rules?

1.) Submissions begin Friday, May 17th at 5 AM GMT, and end on Monday, May 19th at 5 AM GMT.
2.) There will be no required topic or idea. If it's poni, and you want to write about it, go ahead.
3.) There will likewise be no required format. Limerick? Free verse? Iambic pentameter? Haiku? If you want to use it, feel free.
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War of the Poets — Results! 5632

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Again, thanks for participating, everyone. Whether you submitted, perused, voted, or all of the above, I hope you guys had as much fun as I did. Now, without further ado, here are the results!


Top 5

Gold Medal
Muffins! by Pascoite (7.40)

Silver Medal
Derping by Muffin on a Hungry Afternoon by Pascoite (6.60)

Bronze Medal
Eclipse by Golden Vision (6.40)

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Personally, I don't think poetry is really something you can really rate, not by conventional voting standards. I mean, it's poetry. Not only must the poet be skilled in crafting the poem, the reader must also be skilled in analyzing what it means.

On a related note, I wrote Darkness of the Soul. The fact that it got anything higher than 1.0/10 deeply disturbs me–I thought the accented E was enough to throw it deep into Poe's Law territory.
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>participation awards

Why is there a need for winners if everyone participated?

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An Open Examination of First Chapters MintyRest!xMcCHESToY 5535[View]

This doesn't apply as heavily related to one shots, but what elements are important almost exclusively to first chapters.

Fundamentally, what makes the difference between a story that you will read in it's entirety, and a story that you'll forget about in a few hours?

Sure plot hooks are a part, but what's the difference between a hook that works and one that flounders?
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Tactical!fRainBOoMw 5549

I'll write a good hook using nothing but "tell."

Fuckin' watch me.

This zebra right here.
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>I'll write a good hook using nothing but "tell."
This may interest you. It's taught me more about "Show, don't Tell" than anything else I've ever read.
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Pascoite!uxy6g7ov9I 5566

For one thing, correctly using its and it's.


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Let's play a game. Filler 5213[View]


It's that time of year again, gents. The first and second times were a couple of the biggest failures to happen on /fic/, but you know what they say–third time's the charm. The rules are as follows:

1. Each player signs up whenever; players will go in order of sign up. Player 1 gets to choose how it starts, but not where it goes.
2. Each player writes one page, which should be around four to six hundred words. Should the page break come mid-sentence, so be it. The next player will pick up where you left off.
3. No messing with fonts and sizes, and don't break established formatting.
4. Nothing should break MLPChan rules. That should go without saying.
5. Player slots are first-come-first-serve except for player slot 1, which if contested, will be determined by a die roll.
6. No bitching about what someone's already written. This is a game, and no one likes that guy who bitches about shit. We all know this is going to end poorly one way or another, so if it's going to crash and burn, it's going to do so spectacularly.
7. Have fun.
7a, subsection 5, paragraph 2: Rules one through five are malleable.

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Oh dear. In between the screwed turn order and my internet coming down for a couple days, I've completely lost track of our game. I'll have an entry posted tomorrow.


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I'm afraid I'll have to pass this time. I've got less and less time with the finals approaching, and I couldn't get even the slightest bit of writing squeezed in today.

Sorry for taking up everyone's time. Next person can go.

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Corsairs; Requesting criticism on a fic im working on Jurassick 5431[View]

Looking for brutally honest criticism on a fic I'm writing about technology versus magic focusing on Victorian era pirate ponies and futuristic-esque diamond dogs.

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The sticky is the very first thread on the board. It is always the first thread since it's stuck there. Ergo, "sticky".

Anyways, there are already threads made for writers to ask for reviews. Please ask in one of those; the Training Grounds is the most active of them. Make sure to read the thread's rules before submitting to it.


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This, basically. Welcome to /fic/, Jurassick, where there is no tl;dr. You can find a list of review threads (they're marked #Reviewer) at >>159.

Also, I already told you, Sturm–if you're going to make a read-the-sticky post, copy and paste the relevant parts of it. You could have saved a post.

Thread saged.

(Edit: I'm a mod. Usually, my name says "!!Spike ## Mod", but I messed that up.)
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>Also, I already told you, Sturm–if you're going to make a read-the-sticky post, copy and paste the relevant parts of it. You could have saved a post.
Ah, bork it all.

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